Halo’s Rag Doll

Beta Reading

Rewriting HRD involved a couple road bumps. The plot of this book is much bigger than Fire’s Hope and Laevatein’s Choice and I’m determined to streamline this wild ride into the most exciting journey yet. The whole concept behind HRD when I started it way back when was to send the Shadows on a hike, inspired by hiking Old Rag, the challenge of course was to give them a reason why. With the advice of my trusted critique partner I was lovingly told that the original plot made absolutely no sense. I had a series of really good incidents but no lot stringing them together. So when I dove into the rewrites that was my challenge.

I have a lot of self editing to get done before I start Beta Reading but if you’re interested in being on the list then that time comes please shoot me a message using the form below or DM me on Instagram.

The book falls at 130k words and will be broken into 6 parts of five chapters with questions at the end of each chapter. You are not expected to edit but if you do find any nagging typos I would appreciate it if you marked them.

TS:HRD summary

A massive volcanic fissure opens up in the center of the ASH setting everything on fire before vanishing without a trace and Mark feels that he is being called out or taunted by another Shadow of Fire who is a powerful Orchestrator. He’s not the only one with the powers of Pyrokinesis, and Keller explains many Shadows can be grouped with similar abilities. Using an ancient Infusion technique called the Proofs, Mark leads a team of Shadows to follow the Orchestrator’s call into the mountains, alongside Sil who is battling anxiety after the events in LC, and Kip, who appears to be too ill to be out here.

I wanted to explore themes of gender, masculinity, and where violence is necessary. Mark is now very quick to violence with his new Shadow, Strength and the others look up to him, even though time-and-time-again Strength is not good at solving any of his problems. In addition to confirming that Mark is bisexual, I am going to be introducing six nonbinary characters. They will receive varying levels of respect and acceptance from the other characters and highlight the arbitrary nature of gender roles among the Shadows (and us).

This book falls into the YA category with most of the characters around 14-17 years old, it includes disturbing visuals, depictions of anxiety/panic disorder, and contains mild language (i.e. hell, “oh my god”, arse, shit). I always strive to keep my books appropriate for young readers and if any instances of language seem excessive, I will rely on beta feedback to make changes in removing them.


If you’re on the fence and want to know more about The Shadows, you can read the first three chapters of Fire’s Hope here:

TS:Fire’s Hope Prologue and Chapter 1 Some Kind of Meaning

TS:Fire’s Hope Chapter 2 Ash and Fire

TS:Fire’s Hope Chapter 3 Induction

And you can buy Fire’s Hope on Amazon!